NaPoWriMo 2015 Day 5: Break Up Some Emily D.

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Here’s today’s post from the official NaPoWriMo site.  We’re asked to take a poem by Emily Dickinson, remove the dashes and line breaks, and then rebreak the lines to create something new.  I was intrigued.  Punctuation is so powerful that just a little comma here or a period there will completely change the meaning of a phrase. Okay, so here goes.

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Original poem by Emily Dickinson:  After Great Pain a Formal Feeling Comes
 (found on this site created by The Poetry Foundation )

After great pain, a formal feeling comes –
The Nerves sit ceremonious, like Tombs –
The stiff Heart questions ‘was it He, that bore,’
And ‘Yesterday, or Centuries before’?
The Feet, mechanical, go round –
A Wooden way
Of Ground, or Air, or Ought –
Regardless grown,
A Quartz contentment, like a stone –
This is the Hour of Lead –
Remembered, if outlived,
As Freezing persons, recollect the Snow –
First – Chill – then Stupor – then the letting go –
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And now this is how I broke the lines after squishing it all together as one block of prose:
After great pain, a formal.
Feeling comes.
The nerves sit ceremonious like,
tombs.
The stiff heart questions.
Was it He?
That bore!
And yesterday or centuries before,
the feet.
Mechanical, go round a wooden way of ground.
Or air or ought…
regardless.
Grown a quartz contentment,
like a stone, this is the hour.
Of lead remembered if outlived,
As freezing persons recollect the first.
Chill.
Then stupor.
Then the letting.
Go!
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